Some more corrections

1) The first version of the speech, without corrections 

Hard work. What do you feel when hear this word? Does it sound unpleasant or uncomfortable for you?

I believe, many of you, sitting here today, have the same problem – we are afraid of hard work. We don’t like it. Any time we hear the sentence “you have to write a speech, do several tasks and then post them in your blogs till Monday”, we want just throw up our hands helplessly and say to ourselves “Oh…it’s starting again!”

What is our biggest problem? Is it a time pressure and great difficulties? Unbearable demands of work? Or is it something else?

Today I’d like to speak about hardwork, namely, how we see it, how we should see it and what we should do to start working hard.

Hard work is always a stress and pressure. Since school we consider any work as our duty. And if work is a duty, we have to fulfill it in a good way to get noticed and praised.  Alfred Binet believes that any activity is a complicated process of our working brain that includes several important components – first, person is aware what he has to do, secondly, he force himself to perform the task, then, he considers the way how to do it and, finally, picks up the necessary operations for the task. The better result we want, the more effort we should make – and there comes our fears. We are afraid of being mistaken.

Nevertheless, if a person has a plan of action, even a hard work doesn’t seem so difficult and tiring. For example, my uncle and his friend studied in the same university, but one of them reached his life aim whereas my uncle was discouraged in fear of a wasted time and some difficulties.

You should remember, a hard work is not your enemy but it is a key to success. Also, it does not matter who you are and where you come from – everyone is equal before life. If you want to succeed in some scope of action, you should fight your demons – laziness, weariness and resist different temptations. Everything is possible if you are ready to work hard. There are so many examples of people who completely changed their lives only spending more time on work. Even though, our abilities are limited. Some month ago Miles Hilton-Barber was shown on Tv. Watching this man sailing around the world, no one can imagine him to be completely blind. When he was 18, he studied to be a pilot but he started losing his sight and lost it at the age of 20. However, he didn’t give up on his dream and through a hard work became a traveller.

So, what should we do to push ourselves and start working? Our biggest problem is that we see it as a hard work. But we have to find it helpful and pleasant. We should find it motivational, too. For instance, if you face with a heavy project, imagine that it is only a piece of a puzzle that will help you in the future career. Then, make your work more enjoyable. Sometimes it’s better to carry on some things together – do the boring task with your friends. 

Finally, though the phrase “hard work” has the word “hard”, it doesn’t mean something impossible. The only thing we should be aware is that everything is possible. Just be loyal to your dreams and hold your course. If you work hard, you’ll achieve success!

2) The structure of the speech:

  Hard work. What do you feel about it? Is it unpleasant or uncomfortable for you? (attention getter)  I believe, many of you have the same problem - we are afraid of hard work. We don’t like it. Whenever we get difficult home tasks, we are ready to throw up our hands helplessly and say "Oh...it's starting again!" What is our biggest problem? Is it a time pressure? Unbearable demands of work? Something else? (link)

These questions lead me to my thesis:  hard work is not your enemy but it is your friend.(thesis) 

Today I’d like to speak about hard work, namely, how we see it, how we should see it and what we should do to start working hard. (preview) 

First,  hard work is always  stress and pressure. (main heading) Since school we consider any work as our duty.(point support).And if work is a duty, we have to fulfill it in a good way to get noticed and praised. When I was a child, my grandmother always told me that everybody had responsibilities to fulfill, even schoolchildren. That’s why I had to work hard because I felt I was always evaluated by her. I used to working very hard because I still feel this pressure on me.       

Besides, the harder our task is, the harder our brains work. (point support)Alfred Binet believes that any activity is a complicated process of our working brain. First, a person is aware what he has to do, secondly, he forces himself to perform the task, then, he considers the possible  strategies and then picks up necessary operations for the task. The better result we want, the more effort we should make – and there comes our fears because we are afraid of being mistaken.

Secondly, hard work is also a key to success. (main heading)If you want to succeed in some scope of action, you should fight your demons – laziness, weariness and resist different temptations. Everything is possible if you are ready to work hard. (point support) Even though, our abilities are limited. Some month ago Miles Hilton-Barber was shown on Tv. Watching this man travelling all over the world, no one can imagine him to be completely blind. When he was 18, he studied to be a pilot but he started losing his sight and lost it at the age of 20. However, he didn’t give up on his dream and through a hard work became a traveller. 

Thirdly, if you don't know how to start working, learn the techniques. (main heading). The first step is to find hard work helpful. It should be motivational, too. (point support) For instance, if you face with a heavy project, imagine that it is only a piece of a puzzle that will help you in the future career. Then, make your work more enjoyable. (point support)Sometimes it’s better to carry on some things together – do the boring task with your friends.  

Overall,  though the phrase “hard work” has the word “hard”, it doesn’t mean something impossible. Some people are afraid of it because they think there is pressure on them and the work demands a lot energy and effort. But, it’s only way to change your life. (short summary) The only thing we should be aware is that everything is possible. Just be loyal to your dreams and hold your course. If you work hard, you will be at the top of a mountain – that is life. (emotional appeal) Just do the first step!(action step) 

3)TheEffective use of language 

  Hard work. What do you feel about it? Is it unpleasant or uncomfortable for you? 

  I believe, many of you have the same problem - we are afraid of hard work. We don’t like it. Whenever we get

difficult home tasks, we are ready to throw up our hands helplessly and say “Oh…it’s starting again!”

 What is our biggest problem? Is it a time pressure? 

Unbearable demands of work? Something else? 

(concise language/the use of short sentences) 

These questions lead me to my thesis:  hard work is not your enemy but it is your friend.

Today I’d like to speak about hard work, namely, how we see it, how we should see it and what we should do to start working hard. 

First,  hard work is always  stress and pressure.  Since school we consider any work as our duty. And if work is a duty, we have to fulfill it in a good way to get noticed and praised.When I was a child, my grandmother always told me that everybody had responsibilities to fulfill, even schoolchildren. That’s why I had to work hard because I felt I was always evaluated by her. I used to working very hard because I still feel this pressure on me.       

Besides, the harder our task is, the harder our brains work. Alfred Binet believes that any activity is a complicated process of our working brain. First, a person is aware what he has to do. Secondly, he forces himself to perform the task. Then, he considers the possible  strategies. Finally, he picks up necessary operations for the task.(the use of short sentences, the use of frequent signposts) The better result we want, the more effort we should make. And there comes our fears. We are afraid of being mistaken. (the key words at the end of the sentence). 

Secondly, hard work is also a key to success. If you want to succeed in some scope of action, you should fight your demons – laziness, weariness and resist different temptations. Remember - everything is possible if you are ready to work hard. Even though, our abilities are limited. Some month ago Miles Hilton-Barber was shown on Tv. Watching this man travelling all over the world, no one can imagine him to be completely blind. At age of 20, he lost his sight. However, he didn’t give up on his dream of being a pilot.(the use of short sentences)He started working hard. Harder than he did before. (the key words at the end of the sentence). Now he is famous all over the world!

What should we do to push ourselves and start working? (the use of rhetorical questions.  Learn the techniques. (the sentences of different length)  The first step is to find hard work helpful. It should be motivational, too. For instance, if you face with a heavy project, imagine that it is only a piece of a puzzle that will help you in the future career. Then, make your work more enjoyable. Sometimes it’s better to carry on some things together – do the boring task with your friends.  

Overall,  though the phrase “hard work” has the word “hard”, it doesn’t mean something impossible. Some people are afraid of it because of  pressure on them and the work demands.(concise language/the use of short sentences) But, it’s only way to change your life.  The only thing we should be aware is that everything is possible. Just be loyal to your dreams and hold your course. If you work hard, you will be at the top of a mountain – that is life. Just do the first step!

Challenge7

Hi there!

How often do you communicate with your neighbors? Are you afraid of asking them for help?

Today my challenge is to ring the neighbors’ doorbell and then ask them for some sugar.

Well, I was a bit nervous when I came to the door. For some seconds I hesitated to push the button of the doorbell. When I did it, I felt more nervous as I waited for someone to come. Then, a host appeared – it was a woman aged over 35 years in a dressing gown. She had little round face and as it seemed big kind eyes. I’ve never seen her before. Maybe, she was a newcomer or a relative, I still don’t know.

I said her good afternoon and asked for some sugar that I run out of (actually, I don’t). She was very kind to me that’s why my anxiety disappeared soon.  She smiled gently and brought a small plastic bag of it. I thanked her for helping. After this little conversation, I was cheerful and satisfied with myself.
Now I think it'd be great to make friends with her!

Thanks for reading:)

Challenge 6

Today’s challenge is to initiate a conversation with a stranger while riding a bus.

It was evening, and I was going home after the lessons. The bus was filled up that’s why it was almost impossible to find some free space. Also, it was quite uncomfortable to start a conversation with anyone when you had to hold on tight to the handrail. Speaking about my feelings, I felt a bit embarrassing and scared to start the conversation with the young man standing next to me. He was busy with his mobile phone reading the news. First, I decided to start my conversation with a question and asked what the next stop is. He answered me quickly and was quite again. I tried to get him talking by saying “it’s cold today, isn’t it?”. He agreed with me and nodded his head. After that, I asked him about the news. His face brightened and he began retelling me what he had read.  

It was a pleasant experience. Maybe, the next time I’ll also start a conversation with anyone in the bus.  

Thank you for reading this😎

Some corrections...

Hello!
This is my final speech that I've corrected.  

A hard work. What do you feel when you hear this word? Does it sound unpleasant or uncomfortable for you?

I believe, many of us are afraid of hard work. We don’t like it. Any time we hear the sentence “you have to write a speech, do several tasks and then post them in your blogs till Monday”, we want just throw up our hands helplessly and say to ourselves “Oh…is it starting again?”

What is our biggest problem? Is it a time pressure and great difficulties? Unbearable demands of work? Or is it something else?

These questions lead me to my thesis: a hard work is not your enemy but it is your friend.

Today I’d like to speak about hard work, namely, how we see it, how we should see it and what we should do to start working hard.

First, hard work is always a stress and pressure. Since school we consider any work as our duty. If any work is a duty, we have to fulfill it in a good way to get noticed and praised.  When I was a child, my grandmother always told me that everybody had responsibilities to fulfill, even schoolchildren. That’s why I had to work hard because I felt I was always evaluated by my strict grandmother. I used to working very hard because I still feel this pressure on me.       

Besides, the harder our task is, the harder our brains work. Jean Piaget, a famous Swiss philologist, believes that any activity is a complicated process of our working brain that includes several important components – first, a person is aware what he has to do, secondly, he forces himself to perform the task, then, he considers the way how to do it and, finally, picks up the necessary operations for the task. The better result we want, the more effort we should make – and there comes our fears. We are afraid of being mistaken.

Secondly, you should remember, a hard work is also a key to success. In addition, it does not matter who you are and where you come from – everyone is equal before life. If you want to succeed in some scope of action, you should fight your demons – laziness, weariness and resist different temptations. Everything is possible if you are ready to work hard. There are so many examples of people who completely changed their lives only spending more time on work. Even though, our abilities are limited. Some month ago Miles Hilton-Barber was shown on Tv. Watching this man sailing around the world, no one can imagine him to be completely blind. When he was 18, he studied to be a pilot but he started losing his sight and lost it at the age of 20. However, he didn’t give up on his dream and through a hard work became a traveller.

So, what should we do to push ourselves and start working? Our biggest problem is that we see it as a hard work. But we have to find it helpful and pleasant. We should find it motivational, too. For instance, if you face with a heavy project, imagine that it is only a piece of a puzzle that will help you in the future career. Then, make your work more enjoyable. Sometimes it’s better to carry on some things together – do the boring task with your friends.  Just do the first step!

Overall,  though the phrase “hard work” has the word “hard”, it doesn’t mean something impossible. Some people are afraid of it because they think there is pressure on them and the work demands a lot energy and effort. But, only through a hard work we can achieve everything we want. The only thing we should be aware is that everything is possible. Just be loyal to your dreams and hold your course. If you work hard, you will be at the top of a mountain – that is life!

A final speech

Hello, everyone!
Today I'd like to present my persuasive speech on topic "Hardwork is not your enemy, but it is your friend".  Though I've been working hard on it, I think there is always something to be improved in any speech.  I'll be glad to hear your opinion on the speech!

Hard work. What do you feel when hear this word? Does it sound unpleasant or uncomfortable for you?

I believe, many of you, sitting here today, have the same problem – we are afraid of hard work. We don’t like it. Any time we hear the sentence “you have to write a speech, do several tasks and then post them in your blogs till Monday”, we want just throw up our hands helplessly and say to ourselves “Oh…it’s starting again!”

What is our biggest problem? Is it a time pressure and great difficulties? Unbearable demands of work? Or is it something else?

Today I’d like to speak about hardwork, namely, how we see it, how we should see it and what we should do to start working hard.

Hard work is always a stress and pressure. Since school we consider any work as our duty. And if work is a duty, we have to fulfill it in a good way to get noticed and praised.  Jean Piaget, a famous Swiss philologist, believes that any activity is a complicated process of our working brain that includes several important components – first, person is aware what he has to do, secondly, he force himself to perform the task, then, he considers the way how to do it and, finally, picks up the necessary operations for the task. The better result we want, the more effort we should make – and there comes our fears. We are afraid of being mistaken.

Nevertheless, if a person has a plan of action, even a hard work doesn’t seem so difficult and tiring. For example, my uncle and his friend studied in the same university, but one of them reached his life aim whereas my uncle was discouraged in fear of a wasted time and some difficulties.

You should remember, a hard work is not your enemy but it is a key to success. Also, it does not matter who you are and where you come from – everyone is equal before life. If you want to succeed in some scope of action, you should fight your demons – laziness, weariness and resist different temptations. Everything is possible if you are ready to work hard. There are so many examples of people who completely changed their lives only spending more time on work. Even though, our abilities are limited. Some month ago Miles Hilton-Barber was shown on Tv. Watching this man sailing around the world, no one can imagine him to be completely blind. When he was 18, he studied to be a pilot but he started losing his sight and lost it at the age of 20. However, he didn’t give up on his dream and through a hard work became a traveller.

So, what should we do to push ourselves and start working? Our biggest problem is that we see it as a hard work. But we have to find it helpful and pleasant. We should find it motivational, too. For instance, if you face with a heavy project, imagine that it is only a piece of a puzzle that will help you in the future career. Then, make your work more enjoyable. Sometimes it’s better to carry on some things together – do the boring task with your friends.  And, all and all, just do the first step!

Finally, though the phrase “hard work” has the word “hard”, it doesn’t mean something impossible. The only thing we should be aware is that everything is possible. Just be loyal to your dreams and hold your course. If you work hard, you’ll achieve success!

Purpose statement: The purpose of the speech is to tell the importance of hard work and make the audience more organized.

1.  Hard work. What do you feel when hear this word? Does it sound unpleasant or uncomfortable for you?

A.Hard work may be painful for some people and they don’t like it and then avoid it

2.  Today I’d like to speak about hard work:

B. Hard work is always stress and pressure

C.Hard work is a key to success

D. Techniques how to push oneself together and start working

Body

1.  Hard work is always a stress and pressure. 

A.Hard work is a stress for our body

a) Hard work as our duty

b)A complicated process of our working brain

B. A plan of action is way to resist stress

a)  A comparison of two people. One of them has a life goal whereas other does not. They results.  

2.  Hard work is a key to success

A. You should fight your demons

B. Hard work changes lives

a)  A blind man who did not give up on his dreams and started working hard to reach his goal

3.  Techniques how to push oneself together and start working

A. You should find it motivational

a)  A hard work is a piece of puzzle that will help you in the future

B. You should make it enjoyable

a)  Do hard work with friends

C. You should do the first step.

Conclusion

1.  Finally, though the phrase “hard work” has the word “hard”, it doesn’t mean something impossible.

A.Everything is possible though a hard work

B.Hold your course.

2.  If you work hard, you will archive success.

Thank you for your attention!😊

Challenge 5

The next challenge that I have to do to push me out of my comfort zone is to ask for a change in the nearest shop.

Well, it was not as difficult as I expected. Without any embracement, I came to the corner shop. There was a minute of hesitation, though. However, a few moments later I was in line waiting for my turn to come. I smiled shyly looking at the face of the shopkeeper and asked her if she could change a 1000-ruble bill. She answered that unfortunately there was a problem with money today and it was impossible to make change. Then, I thanked her and left the shop. This action turned out to be quite natural and, as I noticed, asking for help was not as problematic as it was in the beginning of my experiment.  

Now I see - carrying out these tasks is very helpful. I cannot but get impressed by the result every time. Some years ago, I couldn’t imagine that I would do anything like that, but now it seems easy!

Nevertheless, there is still a lot of work to do to make myself braver…😁

 Thank you for reading!

Writing a Speech: Editing and Proofreading

Hello, dear readers!

When the text of your speech is written, the next step is correction. My task is to edit Denis’s draft. The parts that were changed are highlight in red.  

Are you healthy? How often do you exercise? Government guidelines recommend that everyone has to do 30 minutes of exercise 3-5 times per week to be in shape and ill less. What do you think now – do you exercise enough?

We live in the world of rapidly evolving technologies. Though the speed of our lives has become faster, we spend less time outdoors and lead a sedentary lifestyle. This leads to my thesis that is exercise will make you more organized and healthy both physically and mentally.

First, exercise really helps you get organized. When you are a lazy person, it is difficult to take the first step. However, all a matter of committing yourself to something will provide you with a lot of positive feedback. Once you start doing exercise and observing positive results, you actually enjoy it. It takes a lot of effort and strong will, but it's worth it. The principal thing to do is to participate in an activity you like. If you start organizing your day, you will no longer be a stressed-out person. You’ll have enough time to carry on with all your activities.

Second, it is obvious that once you exercise you will be in a better condition. You will be healthier in a physical way. Your muscles will get stronger and stronger. Probably, you will lose weight, too. Your body will be in good condition, full of energy and it will respond immediately to any action and any activity that you want to do.

Third, exercising affects you positively in a mental and psychological way. Doing exercise helps you set specific goals which can be achieved. You become aware of your abilities, accept your weaknesses, and your self-esteem goes up. Any sport helps you not to think about school, friends, problems, among other things. It brings you time to think about yourself and no one else. It helps you keep your mind busy and to avoid dangerous habits like drugs.

All and all, doing exercise is very important to any person of any age. So, never stop working out – spend more time in the gym! Because when you move, you move only forward. When exercise, you start living your life happily.